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The chart below shows what Anthropologie graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years

The chart below shows what Anthropologie graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years
The given graph and table
highlights
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 major
informtion
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information
 about the destination
the
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of the anthropology graduates and
thier
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their
salaries
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 after five years of work in
diffrent
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different
 sectors.
According to
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 the pie chart , most of the graduates
working
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work
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 as
a
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full-time
jop
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jobs
,
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with the
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the
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 percentage reached 52%.
In addition
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 ,there were 15%
from
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of
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 the graduates have work as
part time
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part-time
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jop
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jobs
.The
part time
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part-time
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 work and
postgrad
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postgraduate
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 study
has
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have
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 the lowest
percent
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comparing
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compared
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 to the other ,
in
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at
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 5
percent
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per cent
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.
in
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 terms of the table , the freelance consultants
has
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 the highest amount of
salaries
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 , 80% reached more than 75000$.
Furthermore
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 , the
goverment
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government
 sector
salaries
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was
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were
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 20% less than 75000$.
Additionally
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 , the private companies
has
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 the minimum amount of
salaries
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comparing
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 to the others.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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