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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The pie charts demonstrate the proportions of three different nutrients
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such
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, such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fats and added
sugars
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, which are included in typical meals consumed by the USA residents.
Overall
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, all the ingredients noted are predominantly consumed at dinner, varying from 23% to 43%,
while
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 breakfast generally contains the lowest percentages of unhealthy supplements. Turning to the details, dinner dominates in all
nutrients
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nutrient
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 content with the exception of added
sugars
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. It accounts for 37% of saturated fat and 43% of
sodium
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,
marking
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making
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 it
as
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apply
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the contributor of nearly half of the
sodium
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 numbers. Meanwhile,
percentages
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the percentages
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 of substances included in lunch are evaluated as those occupying the second position after dinner figures. In both
sodium
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 and saturated fat
intake
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intake,
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 it ranges from 29% to 26% respectively, but can be found with reduced proportions of 19% in added
sugars
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.
In contrast
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, not only do the nutrients consumed during breakfast stay at the lowest indexes, but
are
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they are
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also
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 almost identical among
three
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the three
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 categories with 14-16%. What is more, despite having unimportant levels of
sodium
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 and saturated fat, added
sugars
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 can be in snacks much more frequently than in other meals by reaching 42%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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