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The charts below show the reasons of students to study a particular in a UK university in the year 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons of students to study a particular in a UK university in the year 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of
students
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 driven by different factors to study at a UK
university
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 in 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, relevant degree courses remained the major driver to pursue higher education in that
university
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 over the period, with other determinants trailing distantly behind in terms of proportions.
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,
students
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 prioritised the closer distance and top education
quality
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 more in the new century than they did in the previous one,
while
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 placing lesser emphasis on the availability of fitness and social amenities. Looking first at the percentages in 1987, the majority of
students
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 opted for the
university
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due to
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 the suitability of degree courses, making up 35%. Following some way behind were the proportions of learners prioritising the
quality
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 of materials (21%) and noteworthy physical and social pursuits (19%).
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, exceptional instructions and convenient locations attracted only 15% and 10%
students
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, respectively. By 2007, the figures in the mix had shifted considerably. The relevance of degree classes remained the leading reason to choose that
university
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, increasing to 37%.
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, the share of
students
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 concerned about the proximity more than doubled (22%) , and that of those focused on the
quality
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 of teaching increased by 3
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 points. There was a fall of 4% in the percentage of learners choosing the
university
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 , thanks to
quality
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 resources, and good sports and social activities fell out of favour, declining more than threefold (6%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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