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The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents how many times Australian people use
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social
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platform
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platforms
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including
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Twitter
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 and
Facebook
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 apps
per
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, per
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 week.
Overall
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,
The
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 usage of
Facebook
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 by
individual
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individuals
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reach
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 the highest rate in 4 years,
while
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Twitter
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 recorded
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 lowest rate between mid year of 2012 to 2016.
It is clear that
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Facebook
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 was the most popular
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social
 media
websit
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website
 with 25
use
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users
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 per week for Australian people
in
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between 2012 to 2016.
Acoording
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According
 to the data, the use of
Facebook
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increase
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 yearly by 5 in the period 2013 and 2014.
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of
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amazing numbers for
Facebook
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, the record was
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 by
Twitter
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 in
mid 2016
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mid-2016
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.
On the other hand
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,
Twitter
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 faced a massive
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rate
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strting
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starting
 from 2012 until 2016.
Moreover
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,
Twitter
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 overtook
Facebook
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 in 2016 to reach a number of 35
usage
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million users
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 per week to become the most popular platform for
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Australians
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words twitter, facebook with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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