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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
While
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 both graphics display key information regarding
crime
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 in the UK for the past year, the line graph specifically plots the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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 rate, whilst the pie chart illustrates the
crime
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 categories
commited
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committed
. In the line graphic, the ages between 12 to 28 are shown to commit the most
crimes
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 in the past year, with the peak number of
crimes
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 reaching 80 tens of thousands by
20 year olds
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20-year-olds
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.
This
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 number dramatically falls between the ages of 20 to 28, to around 20 tens of thousands. After
age
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 28, a general trend of steady decline in
crime
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 can be observed as
age
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number
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apply
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increases. The oldest
age
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 recorded to have committed a
crime
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 was 60, with
less
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fewer
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 than 10 tens of thousands
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crimes
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of crimes
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comitted
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committed
, and the youngest
age
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0
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was 0
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with 0
crimes
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 committed. In the pie chart, violent
crimes
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 are illustrated to be committed the most frequently at 46% amongst property, drug and public order
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crime
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crimes
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.
While
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 public order
crime
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 is the lowest at 9%, both property and drug
crime
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 have similar proportions at 23% and 22% respectively.
Overall
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, both graphics present critical information about
crime
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 in the UK clearly and concisely. Numbers are written as percentages and figures are colour-coded to ease
readibility
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readability
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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