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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting end reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting end reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
 of
households
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on
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owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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, the percentage of
households
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 in owned accommodation was higher than that in rented, but it declined steadily. The reverse was in rented accommodation
which
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, which
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 increased steadily
untill
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until
 it became higher than in owned.
Households
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 in owned had the highest percentage in
1918
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1918,
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 with just under 80%, but it dropped throughout the period,
while
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households
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 in rented started from the lowest
with
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, with
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 just over 20% and it rose
up
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. In 1971, both
households
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in
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owned and
in
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rented were
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 with 50%. After the
equalation
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equalisation
,
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 are
then
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 diverged steadily from each
others
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, dropping in
households
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in
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owned to around 30% in 2001, a slight increase to around 35% in 2011.
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households
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 in rented continued its
increasing
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 up to 2001 with about 70%, before a slight
declined
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 to just over 60% in 2011.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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