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Writing Samples
Band 5

The plans below show a city centre before and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The two images illustrate the map of the
city
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 centre and how the infrastructure has changed from 1950 to the present day.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that residential areas expanded as the population of the
city
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 increased dramatically and new facilities were built and enlarged to meet the needs of citizens.
To begin
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 with, in 1950 the population was 20,000 , and these numbers have increased 10 times over time , making up 200,000 inhabitants.
Thus
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, the residential zone expanded to the north, east,south and west sides of the
city
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. The river was transformed into a lake that divided the residential area into north and south parts , which were connected by a bridge.
Furthermore
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, the business district that was located in the centre of the map doubled in size and was
also
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 divided by a lake. The number of major roads increased , making it easier to move in the
city
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.
In addition
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, the government building that was located in the area was moved
further
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 to the bottom of the map.

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task achievement
Add more details about how the areas changed and include specific examples to better explain your points.
coherence
Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to make your ideas flow better between sentences.
task achievement
Try to clarify the reasons why the population increased and how it impacted the changes you described.
task achievement
The essay identifies key changes in the city centre clearly.
coherence
The introduction gives a clear overview of the changes over time.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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