The Diagram below describes how water is stored and used to produce electricity. Write an academic report indicating the main features and how they are interrelated

The Diagram below describes how water is stored and used to produce electricity. Write an academic report indicating the main features and how they are interrelated
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The Diagram below describes how water is stored and used to produce electricity. Write an academic report indicating the main features and how they are interrelated
The process provides key information about how water produces electric power.
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, it is a complex process by man-made with 8 stages, beginning with the heat of the sun over the sea, and end up to lighting the buildings.
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, the sun's heat reflects the water
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letting
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the water be too hot would cause evaporation to make up the clouds , which is the second part.
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, the third phase in rainy weather drops up, fourthly, the reservoir will fill up
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the dam edge. At the next stage, below the dam where the valve located, it is open
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close in the time, when it open to the six stage, the turbines push the power to a highier voltage cables,
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in the saven step the high volt send it to the transformer station who controlls in sending the electricity to shooling areas and medical care plases, which is
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stage.

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