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Band 2.5

Many countries are experiencing serious problems with their environment, with pollution of their land, water and air. What are these problems and how might they be reduced?

Two of the biggest
todays
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problems
are
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today are
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 pollution and damage to the environment, but is it as big as we think
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 how can we fix it?
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i
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 want to talk about modern transport. Today we`re using cars, planes, ships and more.
Mostly
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 of them
make
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 a lot of problems for our planet because they use petrol engines
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 cause air pollution. One way of solving
this
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 problem is to start using transport with electric motors
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 as
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result
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 we will decrease
amount
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 of grease in
air
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the air
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.
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 major problem is water pollution in rivers, seas and oceans. People
throwing
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throw
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 trash and plastic, factories release waste and
its
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 all
harms
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harming
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water
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the water
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 ecosystem. By doing
this
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fish
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 and marine animals die,
water
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and water
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 is
pollute
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polluted
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. We should stop
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.
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, in my opinion government should create new laws about it
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 of
coursewe
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course
 must be more
carefull
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careful
 with
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, because
it`s
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it
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feed
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feeds
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 us and we live there, so how
we can
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can we
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 not care about nature that created us?

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Use clearer examples and details to support your points so that readers understand better.
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You identified important problems related to pollution and the environment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • emissions
  • deforestation
  • conservation
  • biodiversity
  • regulatory standards
  • composting
  • urban sprawl
  • green technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • waste management
  • pollutants
  • non-biodegradable
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