The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
a
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the
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five
age
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group
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groups
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of British
people
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in different ages
donate
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who donate
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to the charity in two years.
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, the highest number of British
people
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who gave money was in 1990.
However
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, the smallest number of
another
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apply
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people
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was in 2010.
According to
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the
age
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up to
50s
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50s,
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there were
people
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rose
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who raised
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the value of giving money. Approximately
,
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apply
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42% of
people
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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age
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aged
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36 -50 in 1990 donated more than
other
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the other
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group of ages but
this
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value decreased to 35% in 2010. Even though
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about 17% of donations dropped to 7% of
people
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in the age18 -25 across the two years 1990 and 2010.
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, across the two
years
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years,
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the decrease in
number
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the number
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of
people
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who donated turned to an increase up to the
age
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50s
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of 50s
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, it was 35% for
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age
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the age
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51
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group 51
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- 65 in 1990 became 40% in 2010,
also
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it was 32%
over
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for
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age
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the age
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65s
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group over 65
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in 1990 rose to 35%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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