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Band 3

You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

Dear Sir, I am writing a letter to you about your
bus
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service
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. I am a student and I usually use your
bus
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go
Verb problem
to go
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 to my college every day
but
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, but
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 I just read a notice
about
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that
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 your
bus
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service
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 is
change
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changing
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 next week, and I cannot go to my school by
bus
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. I see the
bus
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sevice
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service
 is good and
have
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has
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 a lot of people
use
Wrong verb form
using
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 the
service
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so
Punctuation problem
, so
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 I think you can think again and do not change
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bus
Correct article usage
the bus
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service
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. I hope you can read the letter and you can reply soon for me. Thank you very much. Best regards, Tuan Tai

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce yourself, including your name and college name. Expand on your explanation of the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better by stating one idea in each paragraph. This will make your letter easier to read.
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Use a more polite tone when asking for a change. For example, say 'I kindly request' instead of 'I think you can think again.'
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You have a clear purpose for writing the letter, which is important.
coherence and cohesion
You used a polite closing, which is good for a letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • bus service
  • inconvenience
  • schedule change
  • travel time
  • commute
  • reinstatement
  • feedback
  • survey
  • accessibility
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