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Band 3

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates a university’s
sports
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 centre’s layout today and after its
redelopment
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redevelopment
.
Overall
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, after rebuilding, the
sports
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 centre building will be expanded by three times, and
lot
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a lot
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 of new rooms will be added. A pool at the
center
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centre
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 and
area
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the area
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 around it will remain the same. A reception on the south
side
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 of the pool, a changing room on the left
side
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 and a seating in the right are things
,
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 which will not experience any changes.
In addition
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, a gym on the north
side
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 will not change
it
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its
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 place, and will be expanded to the left. The west outdoor courts will be replaced with a leisure pool, and another changing room will be built below it on the map. Next to
it
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it,
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 a new
sports
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 shop will appear. A
sports
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 hall
,
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 and two dance studios will be constructed
instead
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 of the east outdoor courts. A new café and
third
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a third
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 changing room will be placed on the south
side
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 of the
sports
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 hall.

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task response
Make sure to include a clear introduction that summarizes the main changes between the current layout and the redeveloped layout. Also, consider adding a conclusion to summarize your findings.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to make your essay flow better. For example, words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' can help show the order of changes.
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Try to provide more specific examples. You can mention the dimensions of the current and new rooms or compare more details about the facilities to make your points stronger.
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You clearly identified the main changes between the current and the redeveloped layouts.
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You used a good amount of detail to describe what will remain unchanged and what will be added.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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