The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational settings in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational settings in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational settings in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the ratio of different
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teachers
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from pre-school
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university in the UK in
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2010 .
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,
it is clear that
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women
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in pre-school settings experienced a significant increase ,
while
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in university they showed a
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noticeable
decline
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men
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were
more
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in ratio
according to
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the graph . In
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females
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, pre-school recorded the highest
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99% ,
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in
men
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the percentage was around 1%.
In contrast
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, university settings dramatically increased in
men
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by almost 70%;
on the other hand
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,
women
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were around 30% .
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, in primary school
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men
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, men
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showed a dramatic decrease compared to
women
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when
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, when
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men
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were around 1 % and the other sex was 85%, which is a huge difference.
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, in secondary
school
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school,
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the difference between the two genders is almost 5% .
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, in private training institutions, the difference is less than
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3%,
whereas
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men
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were more
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men than
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women
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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