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Band 4.5

Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

Many people think that creating housing
areas
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 by providing taller buildings is better. Yet I believe that building
houses
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 on wider
areas
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 of land is more
usefull
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useful
 for many reasons.
Firstly
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, building
houses
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 in big
areas
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 can be more beneficial ,
thats
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that's
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 because of the variety of choices you will be able to
do
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make
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 in the huge space you have. In fact, using
this
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area
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 in many ways can
gives
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give
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 the owner more renters and buyers.
Therefore
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, a huge number of owners agreed that
costumers
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customers
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 always look for places with
big
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a big
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area
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 and space. Second of all,
Utillizing
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Utilising
 the big
area
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 could
provied
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provide
 higher income and price.
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, so many people offer high prices in order to have a place with a huge
area
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.
Although
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alot
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a lot
 of people
beleive
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believe
 that high buildings are much more expensive,
but
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apply
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it is not.Big
areas
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 are much expensive than high buildings . That means having more profits and more offers, which is the best way to become known in
real
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the real
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 estate world.
As well as
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,
The
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 owner could use
this
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area
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 not only for
houses
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 but
also
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 for many facilities,
such
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 as malls,
restaurant
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restaurants
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, sports
center
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centres
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 and beauty salons. Adding more,
this
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 could improve the whole
nieghborhood
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neighbourhood
 not
onle
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only
 the place. In conclusion, making
houses
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 on wide
areas
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 could be more
usefull
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useful
. In the variety of choices you will have. Saving
alot
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a lot
 of money for owners and giving more options for renters and buyers. which
make
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makes
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 the owners more known and common in the property world.

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task achievement
The introduction should clearly state your opinion about the best solution. Try to explain why you choose one option over the other.
coherence
Use clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to help the reader follow your ideas better.
task achievement
Make sure to have a balanced view by discussing some disadvantages of your choice in the essay.
coherence
Try to proofread your essay for spelling and grammar mistakes. For example, 'usefull' should be 'useful' and 'beleive' should be 'believe'.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your preference for building houses on wider areas of land.
task achievement
You presented some good reasons to support your idea, such as rental opportunities and income potential.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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