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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph illustrates
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energy
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the energy
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 ratio from different sources of
country
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the country
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 from 1985 and 2003.
Overall
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, the
energy
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 consumption structure has changed markedly.
While
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 oil is still the main source of
energy
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, its density is significantly reduced.
In contrast
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, natural gas and other renewable
energy
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 sources tend to increase, showing a gradual transition to
clearner
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cleaner
 and more sustainable. In 1985,
at
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apply
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the highest position was oil at 52%,
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lowest
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the lowest
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 was other renewable
at
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energy at
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 1%. Equal to the equally important
percent
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per cent
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 was
nuclesar
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nuclear
 with 22%. The remaining use levels are divided by natural gas, hydro, and coal. In 2003, the most used was still oil.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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