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Fossil fules(eg coal,oil and natural gas) are the main source of energy in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy(eg solar and wind) is encouraged. To what extent is this positive or negative ?

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Introduction
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countries
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now days
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are depends
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fossil
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fuels
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energy
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why there are some
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alternative
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butter
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fuels
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way ther are some
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recommend
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alternative
energy
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because
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fossil
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fuels
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cost
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make
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mayt
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may
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what
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useing
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using
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energy
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there
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 are many things that
makes
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make
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butter
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better
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 than the fossil
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fules
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fuels
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for
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example
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 will not harm the environment .
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i
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alternative
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is
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are
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 the best way to get
energy
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the
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countries
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their
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first
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primary
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of
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energy
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then
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 they can use the fossil
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fules
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fuels
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the
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harm
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harms
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 the environment

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task achievement
You should clearly state your main points and support them with examples. This will help the reader understand your argument better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas smoothly. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'also', and 'in conclusion' to make it easier to follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Some words are misspelled, and sentences are unclear, which makes it harder to read your essay.
task achievement
You have a clear stance on promoting alternative sources of energy, which gives your essay a purpose.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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