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The bar chart below gives information on the numbers of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information on the numbers of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how many
workers
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 in different occupations who came to Australia from 2009 to 2012.
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, what stands out from the chart is that in all years, the small
number
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 of
people
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 worked as computer
programmers
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 ,
while
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 accounting was the most common job for migrants. As the chart shows, in 2009, working as an accountant was as popular as a
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 engineer, with 20,000
people
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 and around 18,000
people
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.The
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 of
people
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 who worked as chefs was approximately 17,000.A minority of
people
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 were employed as computer
programmers
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.By the next year in 2010, the
number
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 of individuals who worked as accountants was by far the highest of all, with about 27,000.The
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 of
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 employed as
software
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 engineers was slightly higher than the
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 of cooks, with 21,000 and 17,000 , respectively. 4,000
people
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 came to Australia to work as
programmers
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. As for 2011, the count of
people
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 who were employed as accountants was as high as the
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 of
software
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 engineers, with 22,000.The proportion of migrants who were employed as chefs was not nearly as high as the
number
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 of
programmers
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, with 17,000 and 3,000 , respectively. When it comes to 2012, working as an accountant was the most preferred, with 21,000. Regarding
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 the proportion of
people
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 who worked as a chef and
software
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 engineer was a bit similar, with about 15,000. 5,000 migrants came to Australia to work as
programmers
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, programmers, software with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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