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If a product is good and meets customer needs,then people will buy it. So advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is said that advertising for a
product
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 with
a
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apply
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good customer satisfaction is not necessary. I completely disagree with
this
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 view. In my opinion, advertising has a strong effect on people because it represents the success of companies
for
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in
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 making
high quality
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high-quality
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 products. The first reason is
advertising
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that advertising
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 has a positive influence on individuals and interests them in buying goods. It is a common belief among people that when a company makes more advertisements and tries to show its
product
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 through social media or other platforms, it is probably a successful company with
high quality
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 products.
In other words
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, advertising makes a good impression on society, leading to more sales.
For example
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, big manufacturers like Adidas always update their commercials even if they are very popular. Another reason for advertising is introducing new products and providing
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last
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the latest
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 updates for customers. Some people are very interested in
to follow
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following
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 the news of their
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favourite
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favorite
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favourite
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 production. It makes it necessary to build new commercials for a new item or those just
are
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apply
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added some features and
acceptable
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are acceptable
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 goods of a company. It can not only contribute to more sales but
also
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keeps
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keep
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 a popular production on customers’ minds.
To sum up
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, making more advertisements is important
rather
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than generating a good
product
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 and meeting customers’ needs. I believe it is not enough for companies
just
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to just
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making
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make
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 an efficient
product
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, and it might be better for them to stay popular and have more sales by producing more advertisements.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and rephrase it in the conclusion.
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Try to provide more specific examples that directly support your points.
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You have a clear opinion and address the question directly.
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Your reasons are relevant and support your view.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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