The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The map illustrates the differences in
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town
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the town
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Shakefield
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of Shakefield
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from 1995 to
current
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the current
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time
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.
Overall
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, looking at the map, it can be seen that the
town
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undergone
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has undergone
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significant changes from 1995 to
present
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the present
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time
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. It
has now
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now has
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new apartments, holiday homes and some houses
has
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have
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been extended in the west,
while
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golf
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a golf
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course, and tennis
center
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centre
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etc
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, etc
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...
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,
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has
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have
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been built.
Firstly
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, in the north west side of the
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town,
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town
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town,
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the houses
has
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have
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been extended,
while
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on the north east public park has been removed and replaced with
hoilday
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holiday
homes.
Moreover
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,
golf
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the golf
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course and tennis
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centre
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center
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centre
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have
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has
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have
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replaced the
farm land
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farmland
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now, and
new
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a new
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car park
is
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has been
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added
in
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next to the road.
Hotel
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The hotel
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in the middle has extended
their
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its
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space over the period.
Lastly
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, in the south west of the
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Shakefield,
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Shakefield
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Shakefield,
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the apartments
is
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are
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added,
while
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in the sea morning fish boat was removed.
Coffee
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The coffee
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shop remained at the original place
,
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and connected with
road
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the road
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.
Furthermore
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, in the
sea
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sea,
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now new sailing
yatch
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yacht
is sailing in
present
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the present
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time
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. Shakefield
town
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has increased their facilities for
citizen
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citizens
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over
the
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apply
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time
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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