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The diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks.

The diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks.
The production of bottled and canned
throw
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water
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 with two stages ,
Beginig
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beginning
 with
cleannining
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cleaning
were
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where
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 row water
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is filterid
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filterid
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filtered
,
softend
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softened
 and
threted
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treated
 with
chemical
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chemicals
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.
later
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Later
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on
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on,
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 stage two
start
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starts
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 by pumping water into
bibe
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the pipe
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,cooling and adding carbon
dioixide
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dioxide
. Followed , the carbonated water for mixing in
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the larage
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larage
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large
 tank .
Finaly
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Finally
, refiltering , filling and packaging to
deliverd
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deliver
 in different areas and
store
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stores
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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