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Band 2.5

The plans show the ground floor of the library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates
the
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that the
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 library was repaired
where
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and
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 situated on the ground floor from 2001 to 2009.
Overall
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,
the
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many
room
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rooms
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 were repaired to others at the beginning year, the many new national rooms were added over the year.
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 with,
although
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the
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many parts of
room
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the room
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 were changed
instead
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 of
previous
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the previous
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it
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one
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. The place of
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the tables
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was
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remained in the centre.
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, the Librarian's Desk situated near, which was
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an
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 Entrance and
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 in 2001. The stairs were placed
at
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on
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 the right side
in
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of
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 the library. These developments did not replace and stood
previously
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side by
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 side. By 2009, there were many changes in the library. When the
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 and History were repaired, the new fields were added,
such
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 as Kitchen,
Economic
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Economics
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 and Law.
Furthermore
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, the Fiction which was
at
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the
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above the map was moved
to
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there. The Films and DVDS
was
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were
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 replaced, which resulted in the
apperance
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appearance
 of
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the Chilren's
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Chilren's
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Children's
 area.
However
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, the number of tables was redeveloped, and
as a result
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, there were four modern themes.

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Make sure to describe the main features clearly and use specific details from the maps to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs for better flow. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'also', 'however', 'in addition') to connect your ideas better and show how they relate.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with grammar and word choice. Some sentences are unclear and need improvement for better understanding.
task achievement
You included some changes between the two years, which is a good point.
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The essay tries to compare the maps, which is important for this task.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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