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The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percentage of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.

The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percentage of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of global bottled
water
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consumption
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 attributed to different
regions
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,
while
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 the bar graph presents data on the increase in bottled
water
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 usage in the year 2001 across those same
regions
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.
Overall
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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 accounted for the highest shares of global bottled
water
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consumption
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. All
regions
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 saw
growth
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 in 2001, with North
America
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 experiencing the largest increase,
while
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 Africa and South
America
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 showed the smallest changes.
According to
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 the pie chart, North
America
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 consumed the largest share of bottled
water
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 globally, accounting for roughly 33% of total
consumption
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.
Europe
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 followed closely, with around 28%. Asia represented a smaller proportion at approximately 17%,
while
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 South
America
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, Africa, and other
regions
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 each contributed less than 10% to global
consumption
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. These figures highlight that the majority of bottled
water
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consumption
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 was concentrated in developed
regions
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, particularly North
America
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 and
Europe
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. The bar chart shows that all
regions
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 experienced
growth
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 in bottled
water
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consumption
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 in 2001. North
America
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 had the most significant increase, with a rise of over 5%, followed by
Europe
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, which grew by around 4%. Asia
also
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 showed moderate
growth
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, just under 3%.
In contrast
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, South
America
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 and Africa recorded the smallest increases, both below 2%.
This
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 suggests that
while
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 bottled
water
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consumption
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 rose globally, the pace of
growth
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 varied significantly by region.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, regions, america, europe, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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