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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The
libe
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life
 graph describes the
number
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amount
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 of energy generated by wind in
diffrent
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different
 nations between 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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 , it is clearly visible from the graph that
highest
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the highest
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county
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country
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thats
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that
energy generated
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generated energy
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 in
megawatts
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 was
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denmark
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Denmark
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then
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comes
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followed
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 right after it
amarica
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America
 between the years 1985 and 2000 .
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Also
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 we can see that
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denmark
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Denmark
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 and
germany
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Germany
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 had dramatically increased in the
year
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2000
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2000,
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while
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india
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India
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has
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had
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 a
slightly increased
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slight increase
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. On the one
hand
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hand,
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 the
united states
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United States
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 energy generated winds went up from 1200
megawatts
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 to almost 1600
megawatts
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 in the
year
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1990
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1990,
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then
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 fell right down
at
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to
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 exactly 1600
megawatts
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 in the
year
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1995
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1995,
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then
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 had a drop
down
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apply
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to almost 1450
megawatts
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 in the
year
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 2000.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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denmark
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Denmark
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 had a significant
grow
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growth
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it
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. It
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 went from 200
megawatts
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 in the
year
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 1985 to 400
megawatts
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 in
1990
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1990,
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than
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then
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 went up to 1200
megawatts
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 in the
year
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 1995 to 1400
megaawatts
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megawatts
 in
the
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apply
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2000.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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india
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India
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 had a climb as well
india
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. India
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 went from 200
megawatts
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 in the
year
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 1985 to 400
megawatts
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 as with
denmark
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 in the
year
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 1990 and it continued rising to 800
megawatts
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at
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in
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 1995 to 1200
megawatts
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 in 2000 .
Like wise
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Likewise
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, germany
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germany
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Germany
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which
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, which
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 had a
decline
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decline,
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 went from 1200
megawatts
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 during the
year
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 1985 to almost 1600 within the
year
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1990
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1990,
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then
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 fell right down at
exactlly
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exactly
 1600
megawatts
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 in 1995
and
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, and
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 had a drop to nearly 1650
megawatts
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 at the
year
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 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words megawatts, denmark, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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