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The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the trend for
hours
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 per week in the production sector in 4 different European countries in 2002.
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,the percentage of troops who worked for 36-40
hours
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 weekly was the highest in Sweden, the UK and Denmark
this
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 year,
while
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 crowd who worked 31-35
hours
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 per week were more in France. In France, the number of bands
who
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 worked 1-14 and 50+
hours
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 was very small at 9 per
cent
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. 41-45 stood just a little bit higher at 10%. 15-20 and 21-30 working times were approximately the same at 15% and 11%. 46-50
hours
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 were at 20 per
cent
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 of corps. 36-40 was at 35% and the highest one is 31-35 at 41 %.
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, the highest one in Denmark was 36-40 at 70 %.the lowest ones were 1-14; 15-20; 21-30; ar 9%.
While
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 50+ and 46-50 were the same at 10% ,41-45 was at 11 %. 31-35 were the second highest
hours
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, which were at 23%. In Sweden, the highest
hours
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 were 36-40 at 80%. 1-14; 46-50 and 50+ were at 10 per
cent
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. 15-20,21-30 and 31-35; 41-45 were the same at 20 and 30 per
cent
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. In the UK
also
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 36-40
hours
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 was the highest
hours
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 at 50,the lowest , and 1-14, 15-20,21-30 and 31-35
hours
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 were approximately the same. 41-45 was at 15 % and 46-50 were a little bit higher than 41-45. 50+ was at 20%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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