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People have different expectations for their jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, while others prefer to change job frequently. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, in
carear
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career
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people
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 usually take two opposite sides. On one hand, many folks like to spend their
life
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 in one
job
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 or office.
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,
job
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 changing for a
lot
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 of
idividuals
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individuals
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of
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apply
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part of their
life
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.
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From
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 my perspective, I like the second group's mindset.
This
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 opinion will be explained in
this
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 essay. First of all, the first group usually have
stable
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a stable
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 lifestyle. Because they know their
limitaion
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limitation
 in
financial
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the financial
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 area.
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, I have an uncle who has been working in
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a mineral
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 water factory for more than 30 years. He has his own house, car, and health insurance. He
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 borrowed from anyone.
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,
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this
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kind
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 of
people
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 feel less stress and
anxiaity
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anxiety
 in their daily
life
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. These good feelings are because of being in their safe zone.
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, most
of
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people
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 believe that
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kind
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 of person is reliable and
truthworthy
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trustworthy
. To illustrate, my uncle I have mentioned before, has a great reputation among our relatives.
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,
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there
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 is a
volitale
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volatile
 group
whom
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that
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take
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takes
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 too many risks in their
life
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.
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This
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kind
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 of
people
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 usually are
confiden
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confident
. They
accpet
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accept
 a
lot
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 of challenges in their lives. To a huge extent, they believe that
this
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kind
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 of lifestyle
help
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helps
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 them to
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 and earn more in their lives. There
is
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are
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 a
lot
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 of
people
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 who make a
lot
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 of money by being risky.
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,
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 number of
people
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 who ended up in
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bankruptcy
are
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 not few.
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,
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this
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these
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people
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 usually show their high standards in
life
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. So, they feel more independent.
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, I had a co-worker who
change
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changed
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 his
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 a
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 of times
,
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finally
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finally,
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 I understood that he tried to learn from other CEOs to build his company. Now, he has a big company, and he always says that
job
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 changing helps me to find out about
weak
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my weak
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point
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 and I covered them by
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gaining
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 more experience. In conclusion,
people
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 feel less stress and
anxaity
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anxiety
 if they
had
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have
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 a stable career. But a
lot
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 of
people
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 tend to
changeing work place
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change workplaces
 and
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job
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jobs
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time
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from time
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 to time is hard and
bring
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brings
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 many drawbacks
,
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;
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 it can
led
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lead
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 to good
outcome
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outcomes
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly present both views in separate paragraphs and support each view with clear examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas. Use linking words to connect sentences and make your argument clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling mistakes and grammar errors to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is a good approach.
task achievement
Your examples from personal experiences make your points relatable and engaging.
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