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The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts illustrate the number of
hours
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 that the
workers
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 have spent in the industrial section per week in four different countries in Europe in 2002.
Overall
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, it is clear from the charts that in Denmark, Sweden and UK  people
work
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 more and the highest percentage of
workers
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 tend to spend between 36 and 40
hours
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 working,
in contrast
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 to other working
hours
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, especially in Sweden,
however
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 in France people
work
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 less and the percentage of
workers
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 spending their time at
work
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 ranges and the dominant
hours
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 is 31-35 .
To begin
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 with, in 2002, the top country with the most working time was  Sweden, as a significant proportion of individuals were working for 36-40
hours
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 (80%) here. The second one was  Denmark, where  70% of people worked in the industrial sector for 36-40
hours
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. And the third one was the UK , with  50% of
workers
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 spending about 36 to 40
hours
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 at
work
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. 
Whereas
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, in France, the top proportion of
workers
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 have spent 31 or 35
hours
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 at
work
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 was 40%, in second place , approximately 38% of
workers
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 worked for 36-40
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, workers, work with synonyms.
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