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The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the percentage of weekly working
hours
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 in the industrial sector for four European countries—France,
Denmark
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,
Sweden
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, and the UK—in 2002.
Overall
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,
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 had a greater concentration of industrial
workers
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 working around the standard full-time
hours
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 (36–40
hours
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),
while
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 the UK displayed a more even distribution across both lower and higher
hour
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 ranges. France followed a similar trend to
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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, but with more variation. In
Sweden
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, a significant majority (over 80%) of
workers
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 fell within the 36–40
hours
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 category, the highest single figure among all countries.
Denmark
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also
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 showed a high concentration (about 70%) in
this
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 group, indicating a strong preference for standard working
hours
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. France had just under 50% of
workers
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 in
this
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 category, but
also
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 had noticeable percentages in shorter and longer
hour
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 brackets, particularly 41–45
hours
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.
In contrast
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, the UK had a much flatter distribution. Only around 40% worked 36–40
hours
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,
while
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 considerable percentages worked in the 46–50 and 50+
hour
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 ranges. A small but consistent number of UK
workers
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 were represented across all
hour
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 categories, including the shortest (1–14
hours
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), unlike
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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, where extreme categories had very low proportions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, denmark, sweden, workers, hour with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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