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The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries. between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparison where relavent.

The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries. between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparison where relavent.
The bar charts illustrate the average cost of products in Algeria, China, and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.The data is given in
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percentage
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percentages
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.
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, it is evident that the price of goods dropped drastically in Algeria over the next three consecutive
years
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.
However
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, China saw dramatic growth of about triple from the beginning,
while
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 Argentina's data fluctuated over the
years
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. Algeria, which started at 6
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percentage
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per cent
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, as the highest in the year
2007
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2007,
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 saw a drastic drop to just around 4.5
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 2008.
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, after a fall of 1.5
percentage
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 it remained stable over the next two
years
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 at around 3
percentage
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.
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Conversely
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, China
starting
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, starting
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 at just 2
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percentage
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per cent
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, experienced dramatic improvement over the next three
years
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. It rose by more than half in 2008 and
around
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by around
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 1
percentage
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rise
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point
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 for the next consecutive
years
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reaching
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at
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apply
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its peak in 2010.
Initially
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, Argentina
which
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, which
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 started at 3
percentage
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 saw an intense rise in 2008 but dropped drastically
at
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to
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 its lowest point
to
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of
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 just over 1
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percentage
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per cent
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.
However
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, in 2010 it rose
back
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apply
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again by around 1
percentage
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.
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point.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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