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Band 4.5

In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in water, so people think that they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or dis-agree?

Using
plastic
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 shopping
bags
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 has been
significant
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a significant
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 source
to
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of
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 causing pollution on
land
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 and in
water
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 in most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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countries. I
strongly
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am strongly
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 supportive
to ban
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of banning
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,
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usage
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use
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 of
plastic
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 materials which cause environmental
damge
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damage
.
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 with, the
plastic
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 materials will be impacting
alot
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a lot
to
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on
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land
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 and
water
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 ecosystems.
This
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 is not biodegradable,
due to
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 which the
land
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 soil
get
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gets
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 spoiled and
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water
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the water
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 system gets contaminated when it
stored
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is stored
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 under the
water
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sytem
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system
.
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, living things in the sea
,
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apply
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consumed
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consume
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plastic
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bags
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 and get affected by
diseses
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diseases
 and lead to
dead
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death
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, and in the same
way
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way,
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 animals
had
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 a chance to eat
plastic
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 materials as
it
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they
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 spread across
in
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apply
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the
land
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. To avoid
this
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situation
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situation,
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 we need to reduce
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usage
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the usage
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 of
plastic
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bags
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.
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, most of us
not
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do not
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using
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use
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the
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apply
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plastic
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bags
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 as reusable
,
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;
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 they
use
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are used
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 only once.
By reusing of
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plastic
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bags
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 can reduce environmental damage.
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, countries like India and Bangladesh
were
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apply
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started using
the
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paper and cloth
bags
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, which
that
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apply
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result
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resulted
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 them to
reduce
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reduction
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 the
plastic
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usage
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 among the people.
This
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 is
the
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apply
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one of the best ideas that
implemented
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has been implemented
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 to safeguard from
the
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apply
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pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, the government
were
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applied
a
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apply
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strict rules to curb
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usage
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the usage
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 of
plastic
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bags
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 and they created
awarness
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awareness
 among the
socitey
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society
 from childhood to
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the elders
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elders
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elderly
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.
To conclude
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, it is a responsibility of each and every one of us to protect all the ecosystems from
pollutions
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pollution
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, and I
supportive to impose
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support imposing
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fine
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fines
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 and
ban
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banning the use
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usage
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 of
plastic
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bags
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. Encourage people to use cloth and paper
bags
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 by considering the environment and
mindfull
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mindful
 of the
land
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 and
water
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 ecosystem.

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task achievement
Make sure to use correct grammar and punctuation. This will help your ideas be clearer.
coherence
Try to connect your ideas better. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
coherence
Write a clearer introduction. Explain why you agree with the ban of plastic bags at the start.
task achievement
Support your points with strong examples. More details will make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You have a clear position on the topic and express your support for a ban on plastic bags.
task achievement
Your second body paragraph suggests a good example with countries that use paper and cloth bags.
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