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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the highest consumers and producers of
electricity
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 in 2014. The units are given in
billion
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kWh
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.
Overall
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, China took the lead in both production and consumption categories,
while
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 Korea, Rep had the lowest figures. In all countries, the consumption of
electricity
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 was lower than the production, except for Germany. China produced 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 of
electricity
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 and consumed 5,322
billion
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kWh
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, making it the highest among the listed countries.
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, the production of
electricity
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 in the United States (4,099) was higher than its consumption (3,866), ranking it second
overall
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. The amounts of
electricity
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 usage and output in Russia and Japan are comparable, with Russia generating 1,057
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming 936
billion
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kWh
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, and Japan producing 1,038
billion
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kWh
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 and using 936.2
billion
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kWh
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. Russia and Japan stood
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in
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 the third and fourth positions, respectively. In terms of India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany, their outputs ranged from 871 to 526
billion
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kWh
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while
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 their usage ranged from 698.8 to 582.5
billion
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kWh
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. In comparison, the
corrsponding
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corresponding
 figures for the Republic of Korea were only 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 and 449.5, making it the smallest
electricity
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 producing and consuming country.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • top ten countries
  • bar chart
  • data representation
  • significant figures
  • discrepancy
  • outliers
  • comparative analysis
  • resource management
  • energy policy
  • reliant on imports
  • balanced ratio
  • notable trends
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