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Band 4.5

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil, or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people
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 are not writing by hand today.
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because
people
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use
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 believe
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 is a negative habit for
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 to have.
Indiviuals
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Individuals
 almost stop writing by
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hand
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due to
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 other words, a person who
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writes
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 by hand may be looked at
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weird
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becuase
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because
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society has
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so
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 rare nowadays to
use
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 hands when writing, thanks to
techonolgical
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technological
 development.
Everynoe
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Everyone
 now seems to have their own devices all the time
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them
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apply
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, having
much
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 more alternatives than ever when
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it comes
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 to writing
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their
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even small devices that they have all the time.
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culitvate
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cultivates
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make
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 it hard when coming to writing by
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hand
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, when we have easier ways.
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, many college students have their own
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 to
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take
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 notes on it in their class
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becuase
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because
 they find every
colleage
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colleague
 now
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 that, and would not bring a
paper
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 notebook even if they want to.
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seem
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to not
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not to
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 have any negative effects at all for someone who stops completely using
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a pen
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,
for example
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, when writing, which is not the case. The negative impact is so damaging for the barin
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functionality
.
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because
 when a person stops writing by hand,
he
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they
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 will
use
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electonic
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electronic
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it
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has an auto correction, and correct
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someone's
 mistake without even
recoginizing
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recognising
 and would hinder the ability
for
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to
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thniking
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think
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addtion
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addition
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when
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 we stop writing by
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hand
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,
that's
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mean
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means
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 we are not fostering the creativity that we may develop by times when we
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paper
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for
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 example: the recent study found that students who
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pen
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a pen
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 when taking notes during the
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lecture
,
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 would make more logical
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sentences
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thier
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their
 own words than those who
use
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thier
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their
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iPad
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, almost
guarntee
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guarantee
 that the ones who write on
paper
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preform
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perform
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 better
in
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 the test day.
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to
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 conclude, the modern society makes
people
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use
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 less and less
hand-writing
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handwriting
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 among its
member
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members
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.
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this
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 is
due to
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use
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, and
absuletly
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absolutely
 has an
overall
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 more negative
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effect
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 than
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positive
 ones.

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language
Make sure to check spelling and grammar, such as 'because' instead of 'becuase', 'individuals' instead of 'indiviuals', and 'students' not 'colleage'. This will help you communicate your ideas more clearly.
structure
Try to organize your introduction better. Clearly state your main points and include a concise thesis statement that outlines your views.
coherence
Ensure you form clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a main idea and support that idea with examples and explanations.
content
You have identified a clear concern about the decrease in handwriting and its potential negative effects. This shows your engagement with the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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