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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

Some
people
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 prefer to use public
transportation
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, others think that personal
cars
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 are better,
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apply
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 private
cars
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 cause a lot of
traffic
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 in many cities, which makes public transport better, so
lets
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 discuss the positive and negative sides of public
transportation
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. When it comes to the good side of using public
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transportation
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transportation,
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 there are many
benifits
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benefits
, the
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 first
benifit
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benefit
 is that most of them
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don't
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meet
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encounter
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traffic
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 jams, an example is metro trains. Another motive on the positive side is that it costs way less than personal
cars
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 since
cars
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 need fuel
which
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, which
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 costs more than 6 metro rides. A third
benifit
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benefit
 is that the estimated time of
arrivale
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arrival
 is accurate. The negative side of using public
transportation
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 may be less
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 some might view
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it
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 as more. First of all, even though there is no car
traffic
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, there is
people
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traffic
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, mostly on weekends since
people
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 have their free days from school or even their jobs
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 problem that most can face is that they might be robbed or pickpocketed.
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, some might go through mean and disrespectful encounters. At
last
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, the pros and cons
varies
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vary
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 between
people
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 since some might have different pet
peves
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peeves
 and even a
sence
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sense
 of
patince
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patience
.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to connect your ideas better.
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Provide more examples or details for your points to make them stronger.
task achievement
You discussed both the pros and cons of public transportation, showing good understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your paragraphs is clear, starting with a point and explaining it.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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