The bar chart shows men and women in different age groups who did no exercise in 2005.

The bar chart shows men and women in different age groups who did no exercise in 2005.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows men and women in different age groups who did no exercise in 2005.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and
females
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across various
age
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groups who were physically inactive in 2005.
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, the proportion of women who were physically inactive was slightly higher than that of men across most
age
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categories. In general, older
age
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groups tended to have higher inactivity rates, particularly among
females
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. Beginning from the female's source. Between the ages of 18 and 24, the women increased to 10 , between 20 per
cent
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. In men’s stage was slightly different , with ages 18 and 24 equal to 10 per
cent
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of those who did not
exercise
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.
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, from the second stage , in
females
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aged between 25 and 34, were increased to 20% doing any
exercise
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, and in males in that
age
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the was
also
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slightly increased to 20% of those not do in
exercise
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. And coming to the most advanced level of not doing any activities in men’s option, the gap becomes noticeable that they were slightly higher than the previous , and it was between 10 and 20 per
cent
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. Continuing from the women’s stage, it was 30% at the 35 and 44 .
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in the years of 45 and 54 almost all the stages were higher than before, in
females
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the percentage was between 30 and 40, and in males it was
also
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similar .
Finally
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, in the
last
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stages between women and men had debates , which were about whether
females
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had the highest level of inactivity
exercise
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and it was equal with 40 per
cent
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, and about in men had 30 to 40 per
cent
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, although".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words females, age, cent, exercise with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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