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Band 3

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agr d sagree with this statement?

Improving the
lives
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 of
humans
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 should be the most essential goal of science. In my opinion, I agree that scientists should give the most attention to
improve
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humans'
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human'
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lives
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.
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, I
also
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 believe that learning science should be aimed
to improve
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at improving
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animals
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'
lives
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. First and foremost, upgrading
peolple's
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people's
lives
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 is
most
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 important goal, because our
lives
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is
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 the most precious thing that we have, so we should
focuse
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focus
in
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on
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 improving
it
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them
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 so that we can make it easier.
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, we should not waste our time
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improving other things that are less important than our
lives
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, people should aim to take care of their
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 and their health rather than focusing
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on
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 improving
some thing
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something
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that is
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 related to video games.
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, I think that we should give some attention to
animals
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'
lives
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 because they cannot do that for themselves.
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,
animals
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 can help
humans
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 to relax, and feel comfortable
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,
animals
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 will love
humans
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 when
thet
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they
 try to help them,
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 they will be more
loyality
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loyal
, and they will defend
for
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humans
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. As an illustration,
recent
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a recent
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 study gives information that any animal can be loyal
for
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humans
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 when they help them, even the lion. In conclusion, scientists should learn science in order to improve our
lives
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, because it is
the
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 precious thing, and they
also
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 should try to help
animals
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 in improving their
lives
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, because they are weak.
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result
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 they will be loyal
for
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to
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humans
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, and they will protect them.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and develops that point fully.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear and simple sentences. Avoid confusing phrases or spelling mistakes that can distract from your ideas.
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Your examples need to be more relevant and specific to support your main points better.
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Strengthen your introduction and conclusion so they are clear and summarize your main ideas.
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You express a clear opinion about the topic at the beginning.
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You show concern for both human and animal lives, which is a thoughtful perspective.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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