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Band 4

In many countries, governments are investing heavily in renewable energy sources such as solar and wind power.Do you think the benefits of renewable energy outweigh the drawbacks?

Goverment
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Governments
 investing in
renewwable
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renewable
 energy sources have become very popular nowadays. All over the
world
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world,
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 many solar and wind
power
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 stations were
build
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built
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 during
past
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the past
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 20 years. A lot of money
were
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was
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 spent on it.
Benefits
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The benefits
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 of ecologically friendly
power
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 are great to save our planet.
Main
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The main
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 things are budget saving of many countries and no destruction and
pallution
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pollution
 of the earth,
a
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apply
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water and the air.
Lets
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Let's
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 begin
from
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with
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 zero waste
production
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 of renewable
power
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 sources. Usage of daylight can not be dangerous for the
enviroment
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environment
. Solar panels just save the
power
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 from the sun, without any
production
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 of waste. The same
sutuation
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situation
 with wind
power
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 stations. Both of them are silent and eco
friendly
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eco-friendly
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 source of
power
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. And it is possible to build them
every where
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everywhere
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 you need. Another great solution is saving money.
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Linking Words
, producing
of
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apply
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oil and gas
cost
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costs
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very
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a very
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 high
.
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amount.
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 A lot of human
resorces
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resources
 are involved in those manufactures. Both of them are very dangerous for our planet. There were many crashes of oil
stations
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station
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all
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crashes all
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 over the world.
Price
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The price
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what
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we pay for earth sources can be very high in the near future. All kinds of natural energy
production
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 are very important for
the
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apply
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modern life. In my opinion, only ecological types of
power
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source
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sources
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 can really help us
,
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apply
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to
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apply
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save our planet for our children. Solar and wind
power
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has
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have
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 only benefits without any drawbacks.
Production
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 of the gas and the oil should be reduced in
near
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the near
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years
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future
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. I think only renewable
power
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 can be good for all of us.

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task achievement
You clearly express your opinion on the value of renewable energy sources.
task achievement
You mention important benefits of renewable energy like saving money and being eco-friendly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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