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The line chart depicts the number of factors affecting air pollution in the UK between 1990 and 2005.

The line chart depicts the number of factors affecting air pollution in the UK between 1990 and 2005.
The line chart depicts the number of factors affecting
air
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pollution
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 in the UK between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, there was a decrease in the total amount of pollutants over the years,
while
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 the opposite trend can be seen in transportation
pollution
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. The total amount of
air
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pollution
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 was 7
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990, which had the greatest contamination level of
air
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pollutant
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pollution
. From 1993 onwards,
this
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 figure saw a significant decline, dropping to nearly half of the level and steadily declining until crossing the 2005 mark.
Similarly
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, the industrial sector witnessed a decrease, starting at under 6 million
tonnes
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 in 1991 and plummeting to 2 million
tonnes
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 by the year 2005.
In contrast
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, back in 1990, at the beginning of the period, both household and transportation
pollution
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 had equal figures, accounting for 1
million
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tonnes
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. Despite the similar figures, there was a slight increase in the amount of
air
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 pollutants from transport to over 1
million
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tonnes
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 by 2005,
while
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 household emissions decreased to a negligible level at 0.1
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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