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The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.

The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.
The provided line graph illustrates the comparison between the
population
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 growth in
India
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 and China from 2000, and there is a prediction until 2050, information received from the UN
Population
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 Division. The units are measured in billions.
Overall
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, both countries,
India
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 and China, will have a significant increase in
population
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 in the year 2025
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However
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,
India
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 will have a huge jump in
population
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 as compared to China. Taking a closer look at the figure, it is vivid that in the year 2000, the
population
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 of
India
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 was only 1.0
billion
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, and
according to
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 the UN
population
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 division projection, it will reach a peak of around 1.6
billion
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 respectively. Turning our attention to the second set of data, nearly 1.2
billion
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 Chinese
population
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 was recorded in the data, and slightly boomed by 2025 to 1.4
billion
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.
Moreover
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, there will be a slight fall in the
population
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 growth in the future,
according to
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 the projection. Interestingly, the given information shows the same
population
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 in the year 2010 and 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • compare
  • population growth
  • India
  • China
  • projections
  • data
  • year
  • significant
  • shift
  • trends
  • stabilize
  • challenges
  • opportunities
  • larger
  • faster
  • highlight
  • change
  • show
  • expect
  • rate
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