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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Graph: Average UK salaries, by city.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Graph: Average UK salaries, by city.
The chart
informations
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information
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the average of
UK's
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the UK's
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 expenditure on
incomes
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income
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 in
pound
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pounds
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currency
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apply
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in many different
area
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areas
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.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that London's
cost
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 of
income
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living
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 is the largest
number
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,
while
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 Birmingham costs the smallest amount of
salaries
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 from
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the UK's
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UK's
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UK
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govrenment
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government
.
Although
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 Cambridge has less of people with
salaries
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, it
also
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cost
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's high range of money.
Firstly
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,
In
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in
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term
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terms
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the
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of the
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number
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 of people who receive
salaries
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 from
United
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the United
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of
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apply
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Kingdom, London has the most biggest
number
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 of employees with 50951.
Whereas
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, Cambridge has the
tinniest
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tiniest
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number
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 as 2180. respectively, in the middle, Manchester comes with 4643 people
have
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who have
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income
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an income
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. In
term
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terms
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 of
salaries
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'
cost
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, London is listed at the top with
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cost
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a cost
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 of 33,634,
while
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 Birmingham is at
bottom
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the bottom
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 of the list, as it costs 25,531.
In addition
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,
Brisol
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Bristol
 comes in the middle of the list with
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cost
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a cost
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 of 27,828.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, number, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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