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The graph below shows the percentage of Australians that exported to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australians that exported to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian
exports
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 to
Japan
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, the US,
China
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, and India between 1990 and 2012.
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,
exports
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 to
China
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 saw a dramatic rise and eventually overtook the other countries,
while
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exports
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 to
Japan
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 declined steadily. In 1990,
Japan
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 accounted for the largest share of Australian
exports
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 at around 28%, but
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 figure gradually decreased to just under 20% by 2012. The US followed a different pattern
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 it started at slightly above 10%, fluctuated in the first decade,
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 dropped significantly to around 5% in 2010 before experiencing a small increase
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 of the period.
In contrast
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,
China
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 and India had much lower figures at the beginning, both close to 2%.
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,
China
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's export share increased sharply from 2000 onward, surpassing
Japan
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 in 2008 and reaching nearly 30% in 2012
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 the highest among all. India
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 experienced steady growth, ending the period at around 7%, though it remained the lowest throughout

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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