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The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates worldwide
sales
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 of three types of media:
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games
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 software, CDs, and
DVDs
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/
videos
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, from 2000 to 2003.
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,
sales
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 of CDs went down,
while
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sales
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for
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games
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 and
DVDs
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/
videos
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 went up. CDs had the highest
sales
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 every year, starting with about $35
billion
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 in 2000.
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, their popularity slowly dropped, reaching around $33
billion
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 by 2003.
In contrast
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, both
games
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 and
DVDs
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/
videos
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 saw their
sales
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 increase.
DVDs
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/
videos
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 grew the most, jumping from roughly $18
billion
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 in 2000 to just over $30
billion
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 by 2003.
Games
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 software
also
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 grew steadily, beginning at the lowest point with about $12
billion
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 in 2000 and climbing to $19
billion
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 by 2003. Even with
this
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 growth,
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games
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 software remained the least popular of the three products throughout the entire period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, games, dvds, videos, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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