Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their children’s study. On the contrary those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development . What is your opinion
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task response
Be clear on your view. The task asks you to say if computer games hurt or help study. State your view in one line, then give reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Use a plan. Put one idea in each sentence. Start with 'First' or 'To begin', then 'Next', 'Also', 'Finally'.
grammar
Use simple, correct words. Check spellings like 'computer', 'people', 'pain'. Keep to common words.
content
You try to state a point about harm from games.
content
You give an example of pain in the body.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
There was a debate on whether or not people nowadays are more dependent on others. This essay leans toward the individual’s independence due to not only the technology development, but also social competition.
Some companies have uniforms for their staff which are necessary to be worn at all times during work. It has many advantages and benefits at the same time.This essay will discuss the advantages and benefits and how having a uniform can affect the company's efficiency.
In recent days, a lot of people are spending a lot of money on celebrating personal family events, for example, New Year celebrations, birthdays, weddings and so on.
Some kids spend their time on their cell phones daily. This habit comes from their curiosity which they want to explore new topics. I think the disadvantages are more than the advantages.
Many individuals believe that beating someone is creating something fun and increasing a sense of competition. Otherwise, others are thinking that dealing with a condition is the best choice. I totally agree with people who are trying to compete with each other because it can create several positive views.