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The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs depict how the Pacific Railway Station looked in 1998 and how
looks
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it looks
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 in the present.
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, there are more shops, facilities and
,
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apply
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 more
platforms
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 now than before. In 1998, in the
center
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centre
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 of the station, there were the toilets. To the east, there were four train
platforms
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. To the southwest, a café, a shop and the ticket office had been constructed. In the current days, the train station has
had
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undergone
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 modifications to
give
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provide
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 better installations and amenities for the users. The toilets in the
center
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centre
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,
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apply
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 have been demolished
and
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, and
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 now, a restaurant and two shops have been added. To the east, the old four
platforms
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 are still there. To the west, three new
platforms
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 were
stablished
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established
. To the southwest, a new supermarket has been erected
and
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, and
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 to the southeast, we found the same café. The ticket office was developed and
now is
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is now
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 bigger than in 1998 with one more entrance to give better service.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words platforms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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