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An American film actor once said, “Tomorrow is important and precious.” Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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 that
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 they should be more concerned about their
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, and should be more attentive
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 that
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whereas
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 others believe that
present the
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the present
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 holds more importance. I believe that
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future
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the future
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 is more crucial
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 will explicate my point in
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. First and foremost, I think
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future
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the future
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 is undeniably most important aspect of life because it is rightly said that "The
future
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 is the tomorrow's present".
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, we definitely need to plan it carefully because, if we just focus on enjoying in present, spending
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 and resources on just having fun, without thinking about the
coming
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time
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, it surely will cause our downfall.
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, if we want to have a good life ahead, we need to work hard now by studying and working on
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 grades, getting a good job , and planning our investments. It is really important to think about the
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 because it gives us a motive to give our best shot by passionately working on our dreams with full devotion and
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hard work
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,
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 improving our present as well.
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, it is important to think of the
coming
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future
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time
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, because it will encourage us to eat healthy and maintain a balanced life so that we can avoid
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future
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 health complications
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 as obesity, diabetes, etc. Conclusively, I believe that it has been rightly
said
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 that
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Future
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the Future
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 should be given more importance than
present
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the present
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since
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, since
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 in order to have the best
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future
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future,
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 we will work hard
which
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, which
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 will automatically make our current
time
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 better.

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development
Use one clear idea in each paragraph with a simple topic sentence.
development
Add a second or third example to show you can compare future and present.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, next, also, but, therefore.
grammar
Keep sentences short and plain. Avoid long, mixed sentences.
structure
End with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view.
idea
Clear stance that future is important.
content
Some good examples about study and job.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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