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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that women and men are working
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. I completely agree with
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 helps develop personal and professional
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 provides financial independence.
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people
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 believe that
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 others think it can cause stress and reduce free
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 a job requires individuals to
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 their daily tasks and meet deadlines, which helps them manage their
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, a teacher must prepare lessons, grade assignments, and manage classroom activities within specific timeframes, which helps them become better at scheduling and
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 tasks.
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,
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 helps improve
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. Another reason is
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 builds self-confidence.
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 completing tasks and meeting goals at
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 helps individuals feel more capable and confident in their abilities.
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, a salesperson who achieves monthly targets gains confidence in their
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 and feels motivated to take on bigger challenges. Admittedly, some
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 might argue that Some
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 believe that
work
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 others think it can cause stress and reduce free
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, since
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 helps improve
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, I believe that [refutation]
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which
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makes my argument stronger. Conclusion: In conclusion, I strongly agree that [women and men are working full
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 my opinion,
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 because it helps
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 and gain independence, despite some challenges like stress..
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, I believe the advantages of
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 outweigh the disadvantages, as it plays a key role in personal and professional development.

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task response
Address the exact prompt. State clearly how much you agree and how the idea of sharing housework fits with both working at the same time.
structure
Make a clear plan: introduction, two or three body paragraphs, and a clear conclusion that restates your view.
language
Link ideas with simple, common words. Use transitions like 'first', 'then', 'however', 'in addition' to connect ideas.
examples
Give real, simple examples and avoid placeholders. Explain how each point helps your view.
perspective
Clear stance in favor of both people working.
content
Some real examples (teacher, salesman) support points.
content
The essay tries to explain how work helps time use and self-belief.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work
  • share
  • household
  • tasks
  • partners
  • income
  • chore
  • cooking
  • cleaning
  • relationship
  • balance
  • stress
  • teamwork
  • example
  • children
  • fairness
  • cooperation
  • traditional
  • society
  • common
  • accepted
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