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The diagram below shows the process of electricity production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Process/Diagram

The diagram below shows the process of electricity production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Process/Diagram
The diagram portrays the procedure
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by that
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that
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which
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how
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apply
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electricity
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 is produced.
Overall
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, the process involves two steps, starting from the mining of coal and its amalgamation with oxygen to supply
electricity
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by utilizing
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through
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 various steps.
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, two novel methodologies are involved to proceed
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this
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with this
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in
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 which gas
turbine
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 and
steam
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turbine
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 are major. In the initial step, coal is generated from different
source
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sources
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 of
minings
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mining
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 where it
transformed
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is transformed
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 into a
furnance
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furnace
. Here, it is mixed with oxygen, facilitating combustion.
This
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 reaction will produce the result in the form of raw syngas, a slag, where it is
further
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pass
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passed
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 through
removal
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a removal
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 procedure to separate it into two steps
one
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: one
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 is
formation
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the formation
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 of carbon dioxide, mercury and sulphur,
while
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other
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the other
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 is to pure syngas.
After
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this
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 procedure
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this
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is
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convert
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converted
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 into
gas
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a gas
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turbine
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 to flow it via
generator
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a generator
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 to generate
electricity
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. In
other
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another
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 tactic, purified syngas
through
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is fed through
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gas
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a gas
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turbine
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 to
exhaust
Verb problem
produce exhaust
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 gases and later
transport
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transported
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 to
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steam
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the steam
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 generator for heat recovery
method
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apply
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. From
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this
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this,
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 the heat from
exhaust
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the exhaust
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 is used to
obtained
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obtain
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steam
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, which powers a
steam
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turbine
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 system to generate additional
electricity
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. Both
process
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processes
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 are helpful for the distribution of
electricity
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 to homes and other areas where it is not available.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, turbine, steam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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