The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The two pie charts compare the proportions of
time
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working adults in a particular country devoted to six different activities in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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, work accounted for the largest share of
time
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in both years,
while
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the least
time
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-consuming activity differed between the two periods. Over the 50-year span, working and commuting increased,
whereas
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sleeping and going out with friends or family declined significantly. In 1958, the largest proportion of
time
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was spent working, at 33%, followed closely by sleeping, which represented 32%. Socialising with friends or family made up 19%,
while
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relaxing at home accounted for only 8%. Other interests or sports took up 6%, and commuting to work was minimal, at just 2%. By 2008, the share of
time
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devoted to work had risen notably to 42%,
while
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sleeping dropped to 25%. Relaxing at home increased to 13%, overtaking social activities, which fell sharply to 6%—the lowest proportion that year. Both commuting and engaging in other interests or sports
each
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rose to 8%, quadrupling and slightly increasing from their respective 1958 levels.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • increase
  • decrease
  • shift
  • balance
  • time
  • significant
  • household tasks
  • leisure
  • reflect
  • importance
  • education
  • personal development
  • stable
  • constant
  • development
  • focus
  • responsibilities
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