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Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, while others believe that governments should strictly control the use of fresh water as it is a limited source. discuss both views and give your opinion.

On the one hand, people who live in residential areas believe that they can consume fresh
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 as much as they want, because they consider it a clear residential right.
Governments
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 should provide them with infinite fresh
water
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. There are some rules that must be considered in which fresh
water
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 is not only for citizen consumption, but
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 for improving hygiene. If all
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 resources allocated to residential areas, hospitals and drug producer companies, which are two important factors in public health, do not have access to fresh
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 to do their duties to increase public hygiene.
On the other hand
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,
governments
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 as leading authorities should take action to control
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due to
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 two main reasons.
Firstly
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, other sections of society, as
contributor
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 to society enhancement, will need fresh
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.
Governments
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 have to distribute
water
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 fairly between different
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 of
community
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the community
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 ,
such
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 as agriculture, rural areas, and industrial zones. Agriculture,
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, is responsible for providing people with healthy food, which would be possible with adequate fresh
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. Another reason is global warming. In recent years, a wide range of countries have been suffering from drought and floods
as a result
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 of the changing weather.
This
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 leads to a limitation of fresh
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 sources and makes them non-renewable resources.
That is
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 why
governments
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 should establish
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 strict rules to control
water
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 consumption. In conclusion,
although
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 some may argue that they have the right to use as much fresh
water
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 as they want, Others, including me, believe that there should be some restrictive rules established by
governments
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 to manage
water
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 consumption because of two main factors ,
such
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 as fair
water
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 distribution and global warming.

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structure
Start with a short plan: say what you will cover and your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together.
content
Put one main idea in each paragraph and explain it with one or two details.
language
Check grammar and break long sentences into short ones.
task response
Keep a clear view at the end; restate your own view.
task response
You show both sides and give your own view.
content
You use ideas like farming and drought to back up your point.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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