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The graph below shows the number of applicants to four colleges in the UK from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates how many students applied to the four colleges in the UK between 2006 and 2018.
It is clear that
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college
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colleges
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 A and
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college
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apply
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C showed downward trends.
College
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 A was the most popular of the four in 2006, but saw a significant decrease in the
number
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 of its applicants during the next 12 years.
This
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the
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 low
at
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of
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 4,500 in 2016, and
then
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 slightly increased in 2018. The
applicant
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apply
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number
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 of
college
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 C started at 5,000 in 2006 and fluctuated throughout the period, finishing at 4,500 in 2018. At that time,
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college
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 C became the least popular of the four.
In contrast
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,
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colleges
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 B and
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D showed upward trends.
College
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 D
largely
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 unchanged between 2006 and 2012.
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, the
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 of its applicants surged from 4,500 in 2012 to more than 6000 in 2014,exceeding the other
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colleges
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.
Then
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, it slightly increased until 2018. Focusing on
college
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 B, its applicant
number
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 decreased by 500 from 2006 to 2010, followed by a continued increase to 6,000 until 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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