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Writing Samples
Band 1

you bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not recieved any help

Dear Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my new CH200 model TV
which
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, which
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bought
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I bought
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 two weeks ago from your electronic department store.
This
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 is my second letter about complaining TV
has
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is
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 not working properly. The main issue is internet connection
lost
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is lost
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 every 10 minutes
that
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, that
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 could not connect directly.
Additionally
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, I tested several times, but it
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still could
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could nor
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wouldn't
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wrok
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work
still
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, I
complaint
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complained
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 about the problem a week ago through your customer service department, but I still have not
recieved
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received
 any information or service about that.
Also
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, there are several choices to decide
my
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on my
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 issue
that
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, that
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sending
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send
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 a customer service
as
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representative as
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 soon as possible or change my TV
for
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to
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new
Correct article usage
a new
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 series. I am
also
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 waiting
your
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for your
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 reply. Best regards Gunjmaa

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grammar
Fix big grammar and spell errors to make the meaning clear. For example, say “I bought a TV two weeks ago” and “the TV has not worked since,” not long mixed phrases.
language

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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