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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still have not heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel in the letter Describe the problem at the hotel Explain what the manager had said at the time Say what you want the manager to do

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am Husanpreet Kaur. I recently
spent
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a
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visited your
hotel
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 and stayed in
the
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room 405 B. My reference number was AL987. I am writing
this
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 letter to you to discuss the issues that I faced
in
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at
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 your
hotel
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. Let me explain
you
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to you
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 in detail. I arrived
in
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at
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 the
hotel
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 on 20th August at 6pm and booked a room. At
first,
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everything
seems
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 good
but
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, but
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 the next morning
the
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, the
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 heating system started making very loud noises. I was sleeping at that time, and it disturbed my sleep badly. Immediately, I informed you about the noises and you promised me that you
will
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 compensate for that by providing me a free voucher for my next stay via email.
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 it’s been a week, I have not received anything.
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, I have a next week
plan
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to stay at your
hotel
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.
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, I want to use that voucher for my next trip. I hope you will make up your promise and take the required action. Thank
you
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Husan

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improvement
Task response: You explain the problem and what you want, but say exactly what you want now. Give a clear amount or code for the voucher and the date you want the hotel to send it. A short apology helps.
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Coherence and cohesion: Split the letter into 3 clear parts: 1) what happened, 2) what the manager said, 3) what you want. Use small connecting words to move from one part to the next.
detail
You show the key details: room number, date, and reference, so the hotel can find your file.
strength
The tone is polite and you say you may stay again, which is good for future contact.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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