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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
The table illustrates the changes in the way people travel in England in the years from 1985 to 200. The units are measured in miles.
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, there are seven modes of
travel
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travel,
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 all have different miles. In all years, the car has the largest use,
while
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,
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apply
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 taxi
considered
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is considered
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 to be the lowest.
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 with, in 2000, cars, trains and local buses were the most preferred type of transportation
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 they all had the highest average distance accounted to be 4806, 366 and 274, respectively.
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, in 1985, people used to travel by car, recorded to be 3199 and local bus with 429. Meanwhile, 41 and 42 miles by bicycle and taxi
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, were the lowest in 2000. In total, in the year 2000, the total was 6475, which is 3735 higher than the total of the year 1985.

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